As title says usually I write poetry but I wrote my first song tonight, would love some thoughts and critiques the song is called two tyrants I imagine it being sang to over an acoustic guitar to a folk tune

Hook So I held up my knife and screamed I can’t take it anymore This complete isolation and desolation of spirit So I carved a smile on my face So no one would ask me why so serious

CHORUS Don’t say a word my darling It’s not you it’s me, well it’s the normal life that I can’t lead I’m supposed to take the reins, but it’s life and disease that reigns over me, like two tyrants How can I live a normal life under the subjugation of two tyrannous tyrants

I have a couple different faces I wear, Depending on the occasion The business man, the hippie, anything but the monster life’s made of me So few get to meet the me I truly am Because I trust so few after so many betrayals

I feel I have nothing but the life I don’t want to lose I’ve lost lovers, my friends, and even my whole family God knows I’ll do what I need to feel happiness And that’s why the devil lost his fucking soul to me

So I’ll be the selfish sinner and good guy simultaneously I’ll kill myself and thus the devil incarnate simultaneously I have the answer this time I swear and no one will dare to save me this time I’ll tie cement to my feet and step overboard in rough seas

I’ll Fall leagues under the surface till the pressure is as great as the pressure I’ve felt my whole damn life to live a life I don’t want I’ll compress to the size of an amoeba and finally be the size I feel

Hook So I held up my knife and screamed I can’t take it anymore This complete isolation and desolation of spirit So I carved a smile on my face So no one would ask me why so serious

CHORUS Don’t say a word my darling It’s not you it’s me well it’s the normal life that I can’t lead I’m supposed to take the reins but it’s life and disease that reigns over me like two tyrants How can I live a normal life under subjugation of two tyrannous tyrants

Hell can’t be this bad in fact Heaven even sounds like hell itself My disease, just my luck, is debilitating but not fatal I’m Out of touch with reality without these pills the sights the sounds the feels the emotions, they all like people betray me too

So I hope for reincarnation, if anything, as anything else but human To never know the desperation of not knowing even contentment To never know my oldest and most consistent friend, loneliness

Violence is the great equalizer and I might be small but I’m deadly I know things that peaceful people shouldn’t know My dance with death has left me numb to it all and thus this devil has no problems snuffing life out Violence calls to my soul I’m a pacifist in philosophy alone

Drugs are an answer that works for me Never used to escape but to function or relax It’s the answer to my lethargy and my anxiety Well the only one that seems to work, So there you have it I’ve laid my soul to you

Hook I held up my knife and screamed I can’t take it anymore This complete isolation and desolation of spirit So I carved a smile on my face So no one would ask me why so serious

CHORUS Don’t say a word my darling It’s not you it’s me well it’s the normal life that I can’t lead I’m supposed to take the reins but it’s life and disease that reigns over me like two tyrants How can I live a normal life under subjugation of two tyrannous tyrants

So take me as you see me if you can be real too or else kick rocks like everyone else Someone Show me the world is more than betrayal and greed Show me even a devil like me can find acceptance in life on earth Show me show me show me how to be a normal human