I have tried using a third person point of view to write this story, feedback is most appreciated

Claire watched as Jules slowly undressed, removing her shirt and shorts to reveal her perky breasts and shaved pussy. She couldn't help but feel a sense of pride as she looked at her submissive girl, knowing that she was the one who had taught her everything she knew about submission.

"Good girl, Jules," Claire said, patting her lap. "Come here and show me how well you've learned your lesson."

Jules hesitated for a moment, but then she walked over to Claire and climbed onto her lap. Claire could feel Jules' heart racing as she positioned her over her lap, her ass in the air.

"You know what comes next, don't you?" Claire asked, her hand hovering over Jules' ass.

"Yes, Mistress," Jules replied, her voice shaking.

Claire didn't waste any time, bringing her hand down hard on Jules' ass. She could hear the slap of her hand against Jules' skin, followed by a yelp of pain. Claire continued to spank Jules, each slap harder than the last. She could see the red marks forming on Jules' ass, and she knew it had to hurt.

"Ow, please stop, Mistress," Jules cried, tears streaming down her face.

"Not until you've learned your lesson," Claire said, continuing to spank Jules.

Finally, after what seemed like an eternity, Claire stopped spanking Jules. She could see the relief on Jules' face, and she knew that she had learned her lesson.

"Good girl," Claire said, rubbing Jules' ass. "Now, as a reward for being such a good girl, you're going to eat my pussy and make me cum."

Jules nodded, her eyes wide with excitement. She moved down between Claire's legs, her tongue darting out to taste Claire's pussy. Claire moaned with pleasure as Jules began to lick and suck on her clit, her fingers teasing Claire's entrance.

"Fuck, Jules, that feels so good," Claire moaned, her hips bucking against Jules' face.

Jules continued to eat Claire's pussy, her fingers thrusting in and out of her. Claire could feel herself getting closer and closer to orgasm, her breath coming in short gasps.

"Don't stop, Jules, I'm almost there," Claire said, her fingers gripping the sheets.

Jules redoubled her efforts, her tongue flicking against Claire's clit as her fingers curled inside her. Claire's orgasm hit her like a wave, her entire body shaking as she came hard.

"Fuck, yes, Jules, that was amazing," Claire said, collapsing back onto the bed.

Jules looked up at her with a satisfied smile, her face covered in Claire's juices.

"Thank you, Mistress," Jules said, her voice soft.

Claire smiled back at her, feeling a sense of pride and love. She knew that she had not only taught Jules about submission, but she had also helped her to discover her own desires and passions. And for that, she was grateful.

"You're welcome, Jules," Claire said, pulling her close. "Now, let's go to sleep and dream about all the things we're going to do together tomorrow."