I am at the point where I believe I need some outside feedback on the system I am crafting. If you are interested, please have a look at the link posted at the end. A few notes on the types of comments I am looking for:

1. This is entirely a draft. Suggestions on grammar, punctuation, etc. are of little help to me unless it's specifically related to a clarity issue (i.e., there's something missing, and the sentence doesn't make sense).
2. This a highly narrative, character-driven system where "conflict" is more important than "combat".
3. I am working very hard to be inclusive in my language, so aside from issues related to point #1, I would like to know if there are moments when I've been problematic in my language (non-neutral pronouns, insensitive language, etc.).
4. Feedback is more welcome as comments on the document, but I would take general comments and discussion here in the post.

Overall, thanks to anyone who takes the time to read over this.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1F-Kjl-XfdCmAluWB3KmCVJWrD1pnXzhzrUXsOtV6XQg/edit?usp=sharing