This is follow-up for this thread. As I already mentioned, English is not my first language. And the level of my English is only C1. Despite it is the first level of advanced English, it is still really far from being able to write in well-written literature English.

And as I already mentioned my intention, I tried to use ChatGPT. I asked it to provide 3-4 translations for each paragraph one-by-one. And then pick one of its provided options. In some cases, a bit modified them. What do you think about the style of this text? How is it bad? How style is poor? Is it possible to get people who can be happy to read text with this style?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RQvWn81YyjiadYzAEp2xPE0U3BpDPpeRFZf66w4ZYjk/edit?usp=sharing

As a person with C1 level, I can't feel the difference between poor English and a good one :(

It's the first chapter of my hard science fiction novel. I've described the setting/Universe in one of comments