(English is my second language) One of my books is written from the view point of an immortal entity tasked with studying humanity, the prologue is just a few lines of him (it identifies as a male) ranting about his job and how he was told off for not doing it right, but he landed a promotion anyway.

He picks a seemingly random subject to focus on and ends up focusing on the FMC who is stuck in the middle of a political conflict between the dictator who happens to be her abusive father and the rebel leader who happens to be her toxic ex in a world where a mysterious substance known as T3 can give humans temporary psychic abilities, however, the FMC is deemed worthless because she is allergic to that T3.

The FMC sure did get the short end of the stick but the entity isn’t allowed to help although his powers are limitless.

While watching and witnessing, the entity gets better eventually as he gets to know more about the FMC and the complicated world around her, but the first chapter is just bad with him getting over-emotional and non professional in his endeavour, and this is kinda the point… but I am worried that the bad beginning might throw off readers.