I appreciate some people would finish their story before asking for feedback but I've sort of reached a stage where I feel feedback on my writing style, dialogue and the story in general will help me continue on with the next 60 pages or so I still need to write.

If anyone fancies having a read (you don't have to read all 30 pages) and offering me some constructive feedback I would really welcome and appreciate it.

I suppose what I am most interested in at this stage is whether the story is appealing and whether you are interested in these characters enough to want to know what happens.

I am a gay man myself but do you think my screenplay is representative enough and works as a gay-orientated story?

Thanks!

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"a story of sexual discovery, between two men. Their desires similar but the journey they each take to get there - vastly different. What is the connection that draws them close and how will their actions impact on those around them?"

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ytjis-g6laZuguH6Y28Y5XvCFrIAI9dQ/view?usp=sharing