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This is the prologue and first chapter of my WIP epic fantasy.
I've had feedback from friends who have beta read it, but as we know such feedback can be lacking in criticism as not to hurt the feelings of the writer, although I have always urged them to do so critically if they didn't like something.
The chapters are structured similar to ASOIAF and I hope this story to appeal to fans of that series though I doubt my story could ever become near as popular. Does the story hook you? Is it too overly descriptive? Are the action scenes well written? And do you have any suggestions to make these aspects better? That's mostly what I would like to know, although any other suggestions relating to grammar or dialogue are welcomed.
If interested in reading more, please let me know. It's still a WIP but there are about 16 chapters finished so far and more is being finished everyday.
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Thank you, I appreciate the feedback. That's one thing I know I need to work on and was planning on going back through when the full story is completed and trimming things down in that manner.