Hey, I'm looking for some critique for my Fantasy novel, for the Young Adult category. Its a mix of Wizardry and machines powered by the users blood!

Quick Info:

• Title: Time Thief
• Word Count: 70,000
• Category: Young Adult
• Genre: Fantasy
• Trigger Warning: Violence Against Animals, Violence

The Blurb: In a world where enigmatic machines are controlled by blood and wielded by powerful rulers, Unami, an orphaned teenage thief, discovers her extraordinary skills with these 'blood machines' and is unexpectedly invited to the prestigious Elite School. Unami's journey takes an unforeseen turn as she is forced to team up with Moko, a legacy huntsman burdened by family tragedy, and Pri, a descendant of the feared beast-tamers, to unravel a perilous plot threatening to unleash a climate-altering weapon.

Together, Unami, Moko, and Pri navigate treacherous landscapes aboard a massive multi-chamber train driven by massive beasts, perpetually caught between worlds. As they chase down culprits and confront personal demons, the trio must learn to trust one another and embrace their unique flaws. A frost looms large—can they conquer it and defy an elitist system, or will their fractured histories doom them all?

What I would like to hear about:

1. Plot & Story: Is it engaging, well-paced, and free of plot holes? Does it have a satisfying conclusion?
2. Characters: Are they well-developed, believable, and do their actions make sense?
3. Readability: Is the writing clear, smooth, and emotionally engaging?
4. Genre Specifics: Does the world-building or information feel believable and accurate?

Interested? Here's a ten page sample:

Time Thief (Ten Page Sample):

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1IWeXHXmrponA8cddNbWUDQl39NSQ6sNzp2uV29Shuns/edit?usp=sharing

Love the Sample? (Tym! Here's a Chapter outline)

Time Thief ( Two Chapters):

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gi-nb2uadIOrcwROBqnb77YvR1fb_KdPO410dP40lL8/edit?usp=sharing