Hello everyone I just got done going over and cleaning up the first chapter (might need to be spilt into two) of my book. It's about 4.2k words long so probably on the long side as far as chapters go so that's why I believe I may have to split it in half.

I'm pretty much looking for any feedback from people on it. Whether that be grammatical errors, or just general writing tips. I'm trying to get better and I feel like this is one of my better creations after getting some feedback on here before. That other feedback was on a different project that I stopped working on because I felt like it was a dead end. I might go back to it who knows. Anyways on this one feel free to rip it apart as it is kind of a rough/1.5 draft. I went through the first half of it and made it flow better from what I had.

Let me know what you guys think! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nS0rPfRbtUM2JHJPrhmewObEooK1XCTY9hVGw5BaIdM/edit?usp=sharing