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Working my way through the series again, on White Knight. Right at the end of Chapter 5 or beginning of Chapter 6, as Harry and Murph are staking out the Ordo Lebes meeting location, I think I have a bit of text missing. I can't tell if this was Jim just trying to be oblique and clever, or if my ebook version is messed up. I have the following:

Murphy turned her blue eyes to me, waiting.
I felt my jaw tighten, thinking back on it. It wouldn't do those two kids any good, going over it again. So I pretended I didn't realize she was giving me a chance to talk about it. "There haven't been any more big actions, though. Just small-time stuff. The Merlin's trying to get the vamps to the table to negotiate a peace."
"Doesn't sound like you think much of the idea," Murphy noted.
"The Red King is still in power," I said. "The war was his idea to begin with. If he goes for a treaty now, it's only going to be so that the vamps can lick their wounds, get their numbers up again, and come back for the sequel."
"Kill them all?" she asked. "Let God sort them out?"

And then it jumps straight to:

Chapter Six

"I don't like this," Murphy said. "Helen Beckitt has got plenty of reasons to dislike you."
I snorted. "Who doesn't?"
"I'm serious, Harry." The elevator doors closed and we started up. The building was old, and the elevator wasn't the fastest in the world. Murphy shook her head. "If what you said about people beginning to fear you is true, then there's got to be a reason for it. Maybe someone is telling stories."

In the depths of my memory, I feel like they see Helen approach and can't tell who it is until she turns to look behind her or something like that, and that you get to witness that happening. This is a strange jump. Shortly after it, something similar happens when they are leaving the meeting. One minute they are in the elevator and Harry is brooding, and then there is a jump to the next chapter and you are in the aftermath of the car bomb.

Murphy and I left, and were silent all the way down in the elevator. I scowled up a storm on the way, and brooded. It had never solved any of my problems in the past, but there's always a first time.

Chapter Seven

There was no time to do anything. Even if I'd been crouched, tense, and holding defensive magic ready to go, I wouldn't have beaten the explosion to the punch. It was instant, and violent, and did not at all care whether I was on my guard or not. Something that felt vaguely like an enormous feather pillow swung by the Incredible Hulk slammed into my chest.

Both of these examples seem like the ending of a chapter is getting cut off in the jump to the next one. Can anyone verify this for me?

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