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Original prompt is by /u/HaltAndCatchTheKnick, and can be found here!
I wrote this with what I would say is a very unusual narration style designed to give a sense of uneasiness, so I'm curious if that actually worked (any other CC is also welcome, of course).
With that said, here we go!
A man wakes to the sound of his alarm. His eyes widen. He's in a frantic rush to catch the train, but just as he reaches it he doesn't get on.
Wait, no, I should go back and explain everything first.
Nick Halts was awoken by the sound of his alarm at 7:15 AM. The alarm had been going off since 7:00 AM. He had overslept by 15 minutes. Cursing, he left his black house to get into his car. He left to get to the train station
Nick Halts then drove in his car in order to catch the train. His car was black. His suit was black. The toast he had in the morning was black.
When he had parked in the parkade for the subway, Nick Halts went down the stairs to the subway station. Nick Halts looked at his watch and he cursed. He began to take the steps two at a time.
When Nick Halts reaches the subway station, he sees the train. Nick Halts rushes to get on the train. Nick Halts is too late. The subway's doors close, and the clear glass visibly darkens. Just as Nick Halts reaches the subway, he doesn't get on.
Nick Halts heads back to his brown car. He changes out of his brown suit. He eats a proper meal of brown toast.
At Nick Halts office, a shadowy man arrives. He will sound like Nick Halts. He will think like Nick Halts. He will take Nick Halts place at work.
He is not Nick Halts.
He will overcook his food until it is blackened. He will drink only the darkest of coffee. His coworkers will be used to this. "He is just in one of his dark moods," they will joke. The unspoken lies lingering in the air, only picked up by those diligent enough to care.
He has been Nick Halts before.
He will get on the train to leave. He will watch the world through dark windows. He will get off in the darkest subway station. He will follow the black roads home.
When he gets there, Nick Halts will ask how his day was. Nick Halts will ask if there is anything that he should know of. He will answer that no, there was nothing that Nick Halts would need to be informed of. Nick Halts will thank him, and will then tell him to go off to bed. He will nod, then rejoin Nick Halts car, suit, house, and the rest of Nick Halts possessions.
Nick Halts will go to his room. Nick Halts will take out a small statue of a three-headed woman. Nick Halts will thank the statue for it's services rendered. Nick Halts will give the statue food as thanks.
Hecate will answer that it was no trouble, as she takes the food offered to her. She will say that Nick Halts can always trust her. She is always there for Nick Halts, so long as the night sky is dark and fate is uncertain.
Nick Halts will nod in thanks, and go to bed. Hecate will slowly fade away as Nick Halts drifts into sleep, being rather tired.
A man woke to the sound of his alarm. His eyes widened. He was in a frantic rush to catch the train, but just as he reached it he didn't get on.
But his shadow did.
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