Does the writing of this soft pop song sound too commercial?

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I wrote a song over the weekend and immediately decided to track it. I did a rough mix and after I listened to it, I felt like it sounded just a bit too commercial. I'm not entirely sure that being commercial would be a bad thing necessarily, but I don't want to be that guy who "turned to the dark side" or whatever. Let me know what you guys think:

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