Anyone willing to critique my Cyberpunk short-story?

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Hello, I am a relatively new creative writer and a novice Redditor looking for some general critique/analysis feedback on this Cyberpunk story I've written (3300 words). Feel free to be as honest and specific as possible. My goal is to improve as a writer. Also, I would like some suggestions on a title as the current one is something of a placeholder still. Thanks!

The Warm and Cold of Artificial Space

*I submitted the story to the "Writers and illustrates of the future" contest. As such, I have temporarily withdrawn the story.

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