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[Feedback] Scene from my first script
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I’m working on the first draft of my first ever script, a western. This scene is the opening scene, and involves a duel with no dialogue, which seems a little hard to get right given the length.
I’ve attempted it but I’m not sure if I put too much description or there’s too much text. Any feedback would be appreciated.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ajDMfwiuFAVyXdimD8r3pqH9W6RN-IoU/view?usp=drivesdk
Thanks.
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