I hate your girlfriend. I hate that she’s a bitch to you and I hate that you’re too much of a coward to admit your relationship is over.

And earlier, when I said I was annoyed that she came to rehearsals, I was lying. I loved having her there because I got to look directly in her eyes the whole time you and I were pretending to fuck on stage.

I loved making extra loud moans like you were giving me the best orgasm of my life because I hate your stupid. fucking. girlfriend.

Now fucking slap me.

*****

If you want to fuck me, you have to take me to the bedroom. I want you to fuck me in the bed you share with your girlfriend. I want the smell of our sex rubbed all over where that bitch sleeps.

Otherwise, I’m going home and you can jerk off in the shower while you fantasize about what would have happened if you were a little braver.

*****

Hey folks! I'm back with my second script. The feedback I received on my first one was incredibly helpful and I'm hoping you might be willing to assist me again.

The Performer is a self-proclaimed "bad girl" actress rehearsing an enemies-to-lovers scene with her co-star, the Listener. But why did he invite her over while his girlfriend was out of town? And what will happen if they go off-choreography for the sex scene?

HERE IS THE LINK:

Will You Just Fucking Slap Me? ​

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