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Hey sexy, looks like someone got off of work early! (Kiss)
(Whispers) I know it’s been years but please pretend I’m your girlfriend for five minutes.
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There’s no way that you were in love with me. Because I was in love with you and I threw myself at you and you never did anything.
You were afraid of what? Ghosts? Spiders? Me?
So, you’re just not going to talk to me? You can’t drop a bomb like that and not explain yourself. I appreciate you coming to my rescue, but why shouldn’t I leave right now?
Hi folks! This is my FIRST SCRIPT ever so I'm asking for your feedback before I go official.
Performer is a woman who runs into an annoying and flirtatious co-worker. She spots the Listener (her crush and former friend) and quietly asks him to pretend to be her boyfriend. They go on a fake date but discover very real feelings for each other.
HERE IS THE LINK HERE:
Can I Be Your Fake Girlfriend?
I basically need help with everything here. If you'd like any specific prompts, I have a few below, if you just want to tell me what you think, that's fine too.
Feel free to comment or DM. I come from a writing background so you can be honest with me.
- Any feedback on the title or tags?
- How's my formatting, grammar, and spelling?
- Am I overdirecting?
- Is the emotion believable or do the character's reactions seem too scripted?
- When did you feel like the story actually began?
- Did you skim any parts?
- Should I chuck any sequences?
- Why did you keep reading?
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