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Stone_Vibration is a female looking for a male in Spanking

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Hello, All!

I'm still pretty new at scriptwriting, so for this one I was looking to get some feedback/constructive criticism. I'm a bit unsure of how to pace my scripts, and I worry that I put in a little too much stage direction sometimes, so feedback on those pain-points would be really helpful!

Please let me know what you think, and feel free to be brutal!

-Stone

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Edit: Thank you all for your feedback! I've made a couple of small changes to the flow and wording in a couple of spots, and I plan on posting it to GWA in a couple of hours! ❤️

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Stone_Vibration

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a female

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a male

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