The link: https://scriptbin.works/u/MrZanzibarMcGee/f4m-picked-up-by-a-valkyrie-valkyrie-monstergirl

What is up? It's me again. There's not a great deal I can explain about this one without ranting. You know how they say a picture is worth a thousand words? Well, I saw this picture and got 4300 words out of it.

Picture Inspiration: https://www.deviantart.com/liang-xing/art/Mercy-on-a-Motorcycle-765346714

Synopsis: You (the one making the audio) are a Valkyrie. Like in Norse mythology, your job is to ferry the souls of those who fall honorably in battle to the afterlife. With the changes in the world since the old days, the definition of "in battle" has been expanded somewhat. You find the soul of a man who died defending a woman from a purse-snatcher, but instead of taking him to Valhalla, you decide to use some of your work "benefits" to keep him. Turns out, he wasn't the most romantically involved in life, and is *very* eager to please.

General Notes: At first, you keep a professional demeanor with the listener, which by Valkyrie standards, is a firm stoicism while helping him come to terms with his death. Eventually, you warm up to him, and more of a mischievous, teasing side comes out. The listener is clearly not used to a beautiful woman paying attention to him, and you enjoy seeing him overreact to your advances. Also, I'm not even going to pretend I know what a wingjob sounds like, so any suitable noise you can come up with will probably be fine.

Assume a pause for "response" between each paragraph. (Parentheses) will be for stage direction and voice notes, while {Brackets} will cover any special audio effects, and *Asterisks* are for words/phrases that need emphasis.

GENERIC DISCLAIMER: This script is the property of u/MrZanzibarMcGee, do not claim otherwise. All human characters portrayed are 18 , and all non-human characters are of the age of maturity for their species. You are free to fill this script for fair use on any freely available website; use on for-money websites (Patreon, etc) requires my express permission. You are allowed to make adjustments to the script as you fill it, so long as "the soul" of the work remains intact.

I don't know if I'm quite happy with it, but please let me know what you think! Some of my concerns are these:

1. Any generic issues you see about the clarity, flow, and believability of dialog and descriptions.
2. This script does talk about death and loss a fair bit. Do you think it needs a content warning?
3. I went through a fair bit of stories and descriptions to flesh things out (some of them wouldn't feel out of place in a "My GF is a time traveler" type story). How many of them actually feel needed, and how many are superfluous?
4. I still don't know if I like the amount of dialogue or general length (har har) in the missionary scene. Do you think it needs prolonged, and if so, how?
5. Is the description of the performer's outfit too clunky? I feel like it might be.
6. Tags. Not sure if just [Gentle FDom] describes the dynamic I've shot for. Anything I might be missing?

Thank you again for reading and giving your thoughts.