EDIT: I have made some changes and decided to declare this script finished. The link now leads to the correct version, and I will make another post momentarily.

Hello again, it's Mr. Zanzibar McGee, with my second script, at long last! (The first one was a sweet little number regarding a vampire nurse, still unfilled on this site). Unlike that one, this script has some actual smut to it, and believe me, it was an experience to make it sound the way I want.

Which is why I don't want to release it into the wild (the other subreddits) without a few outside opinions. Any constructive advice is greatly appreciated, but my major concerns are the following:

1. Is it any good? No explanation needed here.
2. Are there any major tags I'm missing that I should have?
3. Length. I know, this is a huge one, but I don't know what I can remove without hampering the story, if anything.
4. I worked a fair number of superhero references and puns into this. How many actually work?
5. Do I overuse audio effects here? I'm afraid I do, but when part of the story is demolishing a building through sex, I feel like it's needed.

https://scriptbin.works/u/MrZanzibarMcGee/f4m-handling-a-superheroine-s-needs-feedback

Synopsis: You (the one making the audio) are Infinite Girl, a famed superheroine with as many superpowers as the plot demands (Seriously, assume her power level is roughly on par with Superman or Omni-Man or someone similar). While you're functionally immortal, your powers have put a cramp in your love life, since you're afraid of having sex with a regular human because you might injure or kill him. This is a world where knowledge of superpowers is commonplace, and everyone is tested for powers shortly after reaching adulthood. As one of the primary members of the "Righteous League", you have authorization to look through these testing records, officially to look for new recruits.

You stumble upon the records for one young man with an interesting file: he has the highest Invulnerability rating you've ever seen, but his complete lack of offensive superpowers means that he was considered unfit to be a superhero. Given your romantic struggles, you decide he might just be fit for something else...