I have finished a draft of this script and I feel comfortable people reading and letting me know what could be improved on.

As the title suggests the script Is about a bad-ass knight that unfortunately never really got to grips with sex and is now bullied by her sister knights at court because of this. She meets the listener on a wild goose chase she was set on by said sister knights and although she ends up embarrassing herself she somehow manages to convince the listener to teach her all about sex. Thus antics ensue...

I envisioned this as taking place in a matriarchal society. As a result many gender stereotypes are simply flipped. The world is supposed to be quite medieval and less high fantasy. This is why I don't call her [Fem Paladin] or something similar. Women are just naturally larger than men here and have a better capacity of developing and maintaining muscles than in our own.

That being said I feel my script still lacks an element of Fdom. I did set out with that goal in mind but when I read it now there isn't that much of It. So, this I would like help with figuring out, as well as probably trimming the fat somewhat and making the sexy bits more arousing and easier to follow and eventually (hopefully) record.

I have attached some helpful art I have found as a character reference for inspiration. (all art is publicly accessible, and I am just linking to the owners posts of it) I really liked this one by simonarpalmer. This is how I would imagine our knight in her element which is combat. She is obviously a total bad-ass in this regard. When writing inspiration was also Brien of tarth if you are familiar with GOT. I love the practical look of her armor. It's not fantasy, so I like that there are no weird gaps or like armor lingerie going on here.

The other Image is of what its like when the armor Is off. This is by elee0228. It was hard to find art of a woman with an amazonian body type looking shy. 99% are just body builder poses. But this piece brings across the vibes I’m going for quite well. Namely, that despite her strength, when it comes to sex, she is clueless and embarrassed. All she knows is fighting and the conservative faith based upbringing she was trained in. And when there is a man present she is nervous.

There is also this other piece by Cutesexyrobutts which is incredible that brings across the vibes of the body type I picture going on Its decidedly very feminine but also very strong looking as well, with focus on big hips and thighs.

Anyway hope you guys like it. And definitely let me know what needs to change before this can go on GWA.

The Script