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3x[F4M][Script] Is there a brony in the house? I've got some scripts I'd like [feedback] on.
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SwitchGentleman is a female looking for a male in feedback
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I'm not a huge MLP fan, but I appreciate that it's a well made show objectively, and since there have been at least a couple requests for MLP themed recordings over the years, I decided to try my hand at writing some scripts. Plus I really enjoy adapting pre-existing characters, so, yay, fun.

I'm mostly looking for feedback on how well i was able to write true to their characters, though any general feedback would also be welcomed.

The basic premise for all of them is that the listener is a human teleported to Equestria by accident. The first time he makes physical contact with a pony: 1. he's trapped in Equestria, 2. the pony is turned into a near-human. Human ears tail cutiemark Wings/horn if applicable. The listener gains wings in RD's script and will gain a horn in Twilight's, if I ever get round to doing it.

I know I could have done it in the Equestria Girls, spinoff universe, but there were several reasons why I chose to do it like this:

First, the EG versions are basically derivatives of the original versions, so they seem inherently lesser versions of the characters.

Also, I feel it makes for more interesting situations. Being trapped in Equestria by the pony results in an instant connection, with the pony feeling guilt or obligation toward the listener, drawing them together.

You get a kind of "only if you were the last guy on the planet" thing going on, where they both know, at least on some level, that there's not really anyone else who is sexually compatible with them.

You have the idea of family friendly cartoon characters suddenly being given the sex drive of a real person being slightly overwhelming for them, pushing them into the sexual stuff which isn't present in the source material.

Finally, as should be apparent to anyone familiar with my scripts, I've a thing for monstergirls, and humans with pony additions scratches that itch nicely.

So, without further ado, here they are.

Pinkie Pie

Rainbow Dash

Fluttershy

I feel Fluttershy was the hardest to script. It was hard writing a character so naturally shy and quiet. I think I got around that though. Indicating that she subconsciously considers the listener to be more a type of animal than a person in the beginning, so well within her comfort zone, then writing for her to take some "liquid courage" placebo for the end. Plus the idea of the rabbit basically telling them "fuck already!" was amusing for me.

Anyway, that's all I've got to say. Tell me if you think I should continue in this series of scripts or not.

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