Hey everyone!

Hoping the community can help me out here. Soliciting the following feedback:

a) The opening vignette / setup / introduction: does it make sense? Is it too long and/or convoluted? Is something lost in the vignette that might be gained by opening the prompt in a different way?

b) Does my setup get in the way of describing the two main characters and their relationship? If you were interested in responding to this prompt, what more would you want to know about either character? What's clear (about the characters, their relationship, and what I'm looking for from this RP)? What's not?

c) Directing people to my DPP profile – is this a bad move? Does my profile / the end of this prompt make me come off like a controlling asshole who's no fun to write with?

Thanks all.

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It's Friday night: your designated guys’ night. Around 8 o'clock, you and half a dozen of your buddies will meet up at The Local (your favourite bar) to slug beers, watch whatever game is on, and engage in the kind of cyclical, cynical debates that sports fans enjoy. You'll head back to someone’s place for bourbon, weed, cigars, and poker around 10. Buybacks stop at midnight. The game (usually) ends before dawn. Rinse and repeat.

New blood is common, so no one thought twice when you said you were bringing your new friend Charlie along this week.

You arrive at the bar around 8:15, alone. Twenty-five minutes later, as you order your second beer, you start watching The Local's one TV that’s perpetually turned to TMZ (albeit on mute). It's showing blurry photos and videos of the most recognizable woman on Earth as well-meaning fans and ill-intentioned paparazzi mob around her as she walks through city streets, airports, and hotel lobbies. The headlines run:

A CHARLIE FOR CHARLIE?
WHO IS CHARLOTTE GREEN DATING?
CHARLOTTE GREEN’S MYSTERY MAN REVEALED!
SOURCE: CHARLIE GREEN’S RELATIONSHIP “GETTING SERIOUS”
“TRUE LOVE” FOR CHARLIE GREEN?

“C’mon,” one of your friends says sardonically, following your eye. “You actually watch that shit?”

You're about to respond when the most beautiful woman to ever set foot in The Local steps through the door. Heads snap around as she scans the bar. She recognizes you and beams. Whispers follow her down the length the bar. It’s the same woman from the TMZ report, not blurry at all now: a tall, tanned brunette with an exaggerated hourglass body and a billion-dollar smile. She’s wearing form-fitting jeans, a faded T-shirt, fuck-you-don’t-talk-to-me sunglasses, and a handbag that costs more than any of your friends make in a year. And she’s heading right for your table.

“Wait, is that…?” Your buddy's jaw is on the floor.

“Yep,” you answer, standing to greet me.

“Hey honey! Sorry I’m late,” I grin, taking off my sunglasses. I waive my hand airily: private jet troubles. You know how much I hate talking about how wealthy I am in front of other people. At least I’m not shy about PDA: your hands find my waist, our lips and tongues dance for a few seconds.

“Guys,” you say after we disentangle ourselves, “this is Charlie. Charlie – the guys.”

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Looking to write a longer-term romance RP in which your character (TBD! – see below) is in a getting-serious, furiously-banging-his-way-through-the-honeymoon-phase relationship with a world-famous celebrity of my own creation: Charlotte “Charlie” Green.

I don’t really care whether Charlie’s a pop star, actress, or supermodel – in fact, I’d like to chat out-of-character for a while to see what kind of chemistry we have and plan out our characters in detail – but I do want her to be so famous, so beautiful, and so flawless that she makes Taylor Swift look like the hippie chick with dirty dreadlocks who plays at The Local’s open mic night. Someone who makes Michael Jackson or The Beatles look like wannabes.

I’d love for your character to be an Average Joe, but (and I can’t emphasize this enough), he should – he must! – be the kind of man that a gorgeous, super famous billionaire would want to fuck (let alone date seriously). Charlotte has dated multi-multi-millionaires, actors, and pro athletes, so whatever direction you decide to take your character, please (please!) don’t make him some kind of pasty, overweight, boring uggo/loser/pussy. Take your Beauty Loves Beast idea somewhere else: Charlie wants an attractive, assertive, confident, authentic, masculine guy who’s not afraid to let her be her best, truest self – this is your chance to be that guy.

If you’re keen on pursuing this RP with me, you need to read my DPP profile (I’ll know if you haven’t). Once you have, send me a message that tells me some essential (and enticing!) information about your character, your initial thoughts on my character, where you’d like to start the RP and where you see it going!

The above is just a fun setup, but if you want to write part of an introducing Charlie to your friends at guys’ night scene, I’d be more than happy to play that.

Chats and DMs are equally welcome. Happy writing!