I’m trying to write a comic and I need to know if I’m on the right path I have an example please help. Red mark it if you need to I’m trying to get better.

[WIP]

Scene 1

1.1.

DESCRIPTION: SPLASH

1.  Serissa is coming around the corner in the busy downtown area. The side walk is full of people and the street is backed up with cars in a midday traffic jam. 
2.  The day is sunny, no clouds in the sky an airplane can be seen flying through the air. The speakers of the car nearest to the sidewalk is blaring J Jonah Jameson as he rants about masked vigilantes. 

Dialogue

J JONAH JAMESON: ALL THESE SUPER

1.2

  DESCRIPTION: CLOSE UP


1.  Serissa is fixing her Afro into a ponytail when the sky opens up a shadow is cast over the street by the portal. 

1.3

DESCRIPTION: VIEW FROM THE GROUND THE SKY

1. A large object falls to toward the ground, the large spider sticks to the tall buildings that line the street without any damage.

   1. Eyes go wide as people realize a giant spider has landed in the middle of the street.

      Dialogue

                  EVERYONE:SILENT
      

      1.4

   DESCRIPTION: Wide shot

2. The spider using its eyes quickly canvases the area. In an instant it jumps and quick turns to face behind itself. Spider legs sticking to the building. The building are unharmed they only sway from the weight spider.

2.1

DESCRIPTION: CLOSE UP OF THE SPIDER STARING MENACINGLY AT SERISSA.

1. IT'S EYES FOCUS ON SERISSA, HER EYES GO WIDE WITH FEAR,EVERYONE AROUND STARTS TO SCREAM, SHOUT, RUN INSIDE OF BUILDINGS,DOWN THE STREET AND OUT OF THEIR CARS.

2.2

Description: Zoo.