Would anyone like to give feedback on my first short?

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https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1vF9PrwE40DGFw1KqI7Mj6s8dHCzfzTYR?usp=sharing

There's the link. I was the writer and letterer, I got someone else to illustrate, so feedback would be appreciated on the writing and letters!

I appreciate it a lot, just looking for some insight from non-biased sources. Feel free to dig in.

EDIT: Thank you everyone for the responses :) I really appreciate the feedback. I'm going to tweak the bubbles, and rewrite the dialogue during the part where she gives her old self the information so it causes less conclusion. Thank you!!!!!

EDIT 2: I did end up fixing up the writing, if anyone cares to re-read, let me know if its more understandable :)

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