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Summary: You've been falsely arrested for stealing paintings from an art museum. When your lawyer arrives to "help" you, you quickly find out she's not a lawyer at all—she's a hypnotist, and she has other, more sinister plans for you.

Script:

[Interrogation room door opens and closes]

Sorry to keep you waiting. I’m Joanna, the lawyer you requested. Nice to meet you.

[Joanna sits down at the interrogation table]

Now, I haven’t had a chance to look over your entire case, but from just a quick skim through your file, it looks like you’ve been arrested for art theft, correct?

Okay, and how long were you in this interrogation room before you requested a lawyer?

Three hours? What did you tell the detectives?

Nothing? Oh, good. Even if you’re innocent, staying quiet until you have representation is in your best interest.

Don’t worry. We’ll sort this all out. But first, I need you to tell me what happened.

[Joanna turns a few pages of her notepad and clicks her pen]

Start from the beginning. Where were you two nights ago when the theft occurred.

At home? All night? And can anyone else confirm your alibi?

No one? That’s alright.

[Scribbling on the notepad]

And you live… five blocks from the art museum. Is that correct?

[Scribbling]

I’m assuming you didn’t see or hear anything suspicious from your home, did you?

Oh? You saw a truck speeding in the opposite direction of the museum? Can you… describe that for me? What did the truck look like?

[Scribbling]

And what time would you say that was?

[Scribbling]

Did you see anything else other than that?

No? Try really hard to remember.

Anything?

That’s alright. We can come back to that question if you think of anything else.

Now, before we discuss any further, I want you to look at me. Perfect. Just look right into my eyes.

[For this next part, Joanna’s tone of voice slowly changes from being matter-of-fact to extremely soothing by the time she says “Sleep.”]

I know this has been a really stressful process for you, but I need you to relax. Can you do that for me? Can you take a few deep breaths for me. Just inhale…

[Joanna inhales deeply, holding the breath for a few seconds]

And exhale.

[She exhales slowly]

Just keep doing that for me, okay? Breathe in… and out…

Good. Keep looking into my eyes. It’s important you don’t break eye contact.

Shhh. Save your questions until the end. Focus on my eyes, and the swirling blue color within them.

Do you feel that? Your muscles relaxing? The way your arms just want to fall to your sides? The heaviness in your whole body? It’s a good feeling. It’s almost… tempting… like something you could give in to completely.

Still deeply focusing on my eyes, even though your own are growing sleepier with every passing moment. It’s impossible to look away now, and you can’t think of any reason why you’d want to look away, anyway. In fact, you can barely think of… anything. When you try to think of anything, those thoughts just dissipate before they can form.

[Chuckles softly] You’re doing perfect.

I’m going to snap my fingers in a moment, and when I do, you’re going to give in to that sleepy feeling. You’ll let go and feel your mind become a completely blank slate.

Three… Two… One…

[Snaps Fingers as she says:] Sleep.

[Joanna laughs] And you’re out for the count.

[Joanna’s voice takes a cocky, playfully dominant tone]

If you weren’t deeply asleep right now, you probably would’ve noticed I’m not an ordinary lawyer. In fact, I’m not a lawyer at all. I’m a sort of hired gun, except I don’t kill people. I hypnotize them. I have all sorts of clients who need memories erased, opinions changed, people humiliated—you get the picture.

My clients are the ones who stole all those paintings from the museum that night, and unfortunately for you, they need someone to take the fall for the crime. So I’m going to alter your memories a bit, and you’re going to confess. Don’t worry. You’ll be out of prison in a couple years.

Hmm? Looks like you’re trying to wake up. It’s impressive that you can resist after I already dropped you, but all I need to do is snap my fingers again like… this

[snaps fingers]

… and you go right back down, even deeper under my control. Completely hypnotized.

See? It’s useless to try and wake up. So just stay asleep. Let me take over for you. It feels so good to be under my control, so don’t try to fight it.

Now… about that art theft…

Everything I say becomes truth to you. You won’t remember anything about that night other than what I tell you.

Nod your head if you understand.

Good.

First, forget the truck you saw speeding away from the museum on that night. It never happened. The image is gone completely from your mind.

[Snaps fingers]

Erased.

[Snaps fingers]

Faded.

[Snaps fingers]

Blank. Your memories of that night are a blank slate for me to overwrite with new memories. Nod your head if you understand.

Good. You’re doing so wonderfully.

Now, this is what you REALLY remember from that night:

Last month, a man on the phone called you from an unknown number and offered you two million dollars to steal three paintings from that museum. He told you the code to disable the alarms and turn off the security cameras. Then, after a few weeks of planning, you finally carried out the heist by yourself. Afterward, you burned all your plans so no there’d be no trace of your involvement. Last night, you delivered the paintings to the man who hired you. He spoke with a German accent and drove a white minivan. You don’t remember the brand or the license plate.

And… that’s it. That’s all the information you need to tell the police. Once I wake you, you’ll feel so incredibly guilty that… you won’t be able to keep quiet. You must confess everything. And if the police need more information from you other than what I’ve already placed in your mind, you can either lie or say you don’t remember.

And it goes without saying that you won’t remember being hypnotized by me. Is that clear?

Good.

Waking on the count of three.

One…

Two…

[Snaps fingers as she says:] Three.

[Joanna’s voice returns to her original matter-of-fact tone]

Now, is there anything you’d like to tell me before we discuss your legal options?

What? You’d like to confess?

Are you sure? You can’t take back a confession once you give it, and you’ll likely be taken to jail once you give your statement. I believe the maximum sentence for this is… ten years. Although, you’ll probably get less than that since this kind of crime isn’t prosecuted as harshly as it is in other cities. And if you plead guilty, you may get a lighter sentence.

Okay. Then we’ll plead guilty. Shall I call the detectives back in to record your confession?

Great. Don’t worry, you’re doing the right thing.