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Requesting feedback and advice for my Young Adult blurb
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Hello,

I'd appreciate any feedback/advice/help for this contemporary Young Adult blurb:

Nineteen-year-old Tim Hayward hasn’t made plans for his summer vacation. He figures he’ll work enough at Panera Bread to make some spending money so he can hang out with his best friend Steve, who was also his roommate at college this year. That all changes on his first day back at work when four girls he went to highschool with stop in to order lunch, all while wearing bikini tops. Whatever plans he might have thought he had got thrown out the window as he joins them on their first adventure of the summer.

After spending the day at the lake with the girls they all head to Steve’s house, where they find out about the cabin that Steve’s younger brother Austin built a half mile deep into the woods. Cut off from all other distractions, Tim, Steve, and the four girls quickly turn the cabin into their home base for the summer.

All of their decisions, including the need to throw a party to kick off their summer vacation, are shaped by their relationship with this cabin.

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